Friday, August 19, 2016

Awakening




She hears a child
crying in the night

she lies still, listening

perhaps a cat
mating or fighting
their eerie calls
float in the air

Perhaps the wind
through the old chimney chutes
sighing

An animal
caught in a trap
whimpering

Strange sensations

Her body quivers

There again, there again

The room spins

She reaches out into darkness

Nothing to cling to

Surfacing,

she touches her face

touches tears



"Ellecee"







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11 comments:

  1. Oh this is so powerful, so poignant. Its difficult being haunted by unpleasant memories.. of days gone past. Thank you so much for participating at Prompt Nights Linda, and for your constant love and support.


    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  2. Few things are as terrifying than discovering that most of the horror is oozing right out of our flesh and bones. Great descriptions, Ellecee. I felt her anxiety.

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  3. So well done.I like how you create the tension and mystery.

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  4. Her mind is clearly recalling something from her deep past, almost teasing her to remember...but will she ever? Now of course we want more!

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  5. This feels quite chilling to me as mother. The sound is initially heard as a child's cry, then rationalized away until the emotion takes over. This hints at so many sad possibilities

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  6. A true example that the story is often in what is not said rather than what is - a suspenseful and touching write which really made me feel for this person

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  7. You captured it! Thank you for this experience

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  8. I'm not sure my first comment worked - what an evocative and emotional poem - very touching

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  9. Very effective use of sounds to create an eerie atmosphere!

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  10. reference to 'child' makes the poem poignant....

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  11. Been there many times....wonderfully written XXX

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