Cool, cool
rush of pain
a red haze in darkness
shadows passing
returning
a song
the ticking of a clock
church bell
memories
cool, cool
rush of wind
pause
wait
there again
whispers
never understood
cool, cool
shadows clinging
leaves rustling
arms encircling
cool, cool
day of the dead
final reckoning
"ellecee"
Written for
my compliments. Your "Cool, cool" urges one on
ReplyDeleteWhistles!!❤️💖This is absolutely mesmerizing, Linda🤗 love how you create a circle with "cool cool shadows clinging leaves rustling, arms encircling cool, cool, day of the dead final reckoning" Sigh..Beautifully executed. Thank you so much for participating at Prompt Nights and for your constant love and support❤️💖
ReplyDeleteLots of love,
Sanaa
This certainly feels like a shiver - the ticking clock and coldness is very real.. i hope it is warmer (though not too warm!)
ReplyDeleteI read your poem in a slow whisper... and the effect was just deliciously creepy. I love this!
ReplyDeleteTotally "Cool" :D "..there again, whispers never understood"
ReplyDeleteHaving heard whispers in the woods at night this line is just perfection XXX
There's a neat little effect you've created with the staccato feel of the line breaks. It's almost like a heart beat.
ReplyDeleteThe coolness and clinging shadows depicted in your piece gave me shivers. Vivid images and brilliant write!
ReplyDeletejust amazing and quite supernatural
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