"Where are you going?"
"For a walk,,,just to see"
Silence
the dogs are
sleeping
on top of their
houses
It is spring
after all
No person stirs
even the wind
is mellow
subdued
All activity is
behind closed doors
Families
no doubt
at breakfast
Babies crying
to be nursed
Elders still groggy
from yesterday's
trip
out on
the land
The moon still
shows
as a
pale imitation
of itself
The only sound
my footsteps
on gravel
An occasional
bird song
A message
a warning
into the emptiness
and beyond
"what did you see?"
"the dogs are back"
"good stuff"
"ellecee"
Destinations and Dialogue
Challenged by Herotomostat Imaginary Garden with real Toads
NaPoWriMo Day 11
Full of sharp imagery--the opening and closing lines are killer.
ReplyDeleteLove the dialogue and the most creative picture of spring, a different and welcome perspective for sure. This lolled along at a great pace and the dialogue slammed the door shut. I loved it. Thanks for playing!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful descriptive piece. I loved this image:
ReplyDeleteThe moon still
shows
as a
pale imitation
of itself
The title gives a special depth of meaning to this beautiful write. "For a walk...just to see" and then "The dogs are back."
ReplyDeleteOf course.
Wonderfully done.
K
Subtle, but very sharp writing.
ReplyDeleteLove the 'feel' of your poem. A place I would enjoy walking.
ReplyDeletea small fragment of time... and yet so full as described here in this poem. The dialogue adds so much ... and I like Kerry's selected phrase as well. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteyeah, i like this... going out alone, experience all the grandness there is, coming back all like yeah, the dogs. keeping it to yourself. i get that. very nice!
ReplyDeleteI like the inner reflections and specially the faint image of the moon ~
ReplyDeleteVivid writing, a joy to read.
ReplyDeleteGreat read. Love how you wrote it..so much to see and hear there is no time for punctuation.. :)
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